The Amazing World of Student Written Essays

This essay was sent to me by a teacher in Detroit as a response to "The Case for the Zero." It was so stellar that I had to give it a post of its own. This is an actual student written essay, and I have deleted the names so as to keep the author and sender's anonymity secure.

This teacher's question was, "How, in good conscience, can I possible give this a 50%?"

Alright English teachers... what would you do with this? Expect my comments shortly.

"I received this essay from a High School freshman. The assignment was to write a persuasive essay about a topic that is important to you. This essay was typed as it was turned in; no spell check, no grammar check. Vilence=Violence, etc."

Oh Gosh! There is so much going on in the world. The law needs to be chanced about Gang Vilence. I think gang vilence would save more people, help more family relationships, prevent crime rate, and save more lives. Gang vilence is very difficult to deal with. With it more young kids would be protected by there own.

From a good prospective gang vilence brings the family closer together. It help the kids come to the parents about anything when in need of advice and help. Also parent will have more respect from the children. When in some situations so deep as gang vilence children and parent will be so close that they will get to the point to sharing almost everything with each other. Most important they wont argue about little stuff and there respect level will be very strong.

Gang vilence has alot of meaning. It means protecting each-other, committment, friendship, loyalty and strength. It can prevent a big dose of crime rate. More young youth will stay out of jail and live good clean lives. They will be more cauious and safe. More families will sleep at night without having to know that there children are not protected. Also even want to help there friend help there communtiy. Good thoughts and futures for children and parents because by having gangs the youth can have some kind of future.

If the gangs are protecting there-selfs there is nothing to worry about. Gang vilence could save more lives. Parents would also worry less! They will stay out of trouble and do the right thing. There will be less accidents happening in the community. Most important kids would attend school more and actually graduate from high school with a diploma.

In conclucion, Gang Vilence has been known as a dangerous and deadly situation. I think gangs should be allowed more kids will be safe. Also parent wouldn’t have to worry as much. The community would be better and kids working together. Kids would stay out of trouble and in school. And many more would live.